The author says:

This is a draft of a new cover for my book, Phoenix Afterlife. I previously submitted my original cover (https://covercritics.com/?p=1349) and received a very useful critique. The new cover, produced by Rena Hoberman at CoverQuill (whom I found through your Designers for Hire links), takes into account all the feedback that I received on the original cover. Thanks for any further input you folks care to give.

[original submission and comments here]

Nathan says:

Absolutely beautiful.  The steel-and-glass building, together with the square sans-serif font, gives the proper first impression of cutting-edge or near-future.  I love how the text on the spine just perfectly meshes into pre-existing elements of the image. And I didn’t notice the guy in the window at thumbnail, so it was an added discovery when I looked at the full-sized version.

If I were to tweak one thing (and this isn’t a make-or-break element), I would change the woman’s posture, leaning her to one side as she’s running, and maybe raise her hand so it looks like she’s reaching for the silhouette on the second floor, not the front door.

Other than that, though, perfect. I’m glad you were able to find a designer who could give you a cover appropriate for your book.

The author says:

Re-release of “The Stray: To Plan”. Changed the title since people kept getting it wrong. It’s cyberpunk mystery, paranormal adventure, science fiction plus school life. The characters are teens, but the language and situations are more suited to adult readers: so it’s not New Adult cos the characters are too young, but it’s not specifically Young Adult because of the situations (and the profane language). As the first book in a (very long) series, the cover is meant to be simple and establish a pattern. The leaf symbol is integral to the story.

[original submission and comments here]

Nathan says:

I think this is a lot stronger in both original size and thumbnail size: the central image is an icon, and the rest of the cover doesn’t detract from it.  (The primary consideration isn’t whether the leaf is an integral part of the story, but whether it’s a memorable graphic element.  In this case, it is.)

I’m still a little confused by the title, since what I see on the cover is “The Stray: Plan,” or possibly even “The Stray Plan” (there are two different fonts in use, but both being strong san-serif fonts, I can see how they could blur together).  You might be well served to add a colon after “Stray.”

Other than that, I think it’s a good job.  Anyone else have comments?

The author says:

Sundrop Sonata is a contemporary woman-and-child-on-the-run suspense novel featuring a heroine whose skills as a piano turner both trip the action and eventually resolve it…The widest target audience would be women readers who are looking for something different in mystery and suspense novels or who have a music background/interest.

Nathan says:

I think it’s a good cover, but not for the book you describe. (BTW, I assume “piano turner” is a typo, unless we’ve started rotating them like crops.)  At best, it could be mistaken for a “cozy” mystery; at worst — and more likely — readers would assume that it’s a memoir, or litfic.  The “A Novel of Suspense” sub/supertitle doesn’t make up for the fact that there’s no suspense in the cover.

And what does “suspense” look like?  At its most basic, it looks like something is wrong with the world.  Too many shadows, or too stark, or lighting that says that something is out of kilter. The photo for the cover of your book is the opposite — it looks like everything’s perfect.

Now, here’s what I did in five minutes, playing with exposure and saturation and a couple of filters.  I’m not saying this is a good cover, but I think it shows that making things look a little less “perfect” and “right” is good.

Again: Not a good cover. But I hope it indicates the possibilities.  If I were working with the original photo, I’d be playing with things like having the girl be the only red tone on the cover, adding some scratch marks, playing with a heavier, grittier font… I hope this gives you some ideas.

Anyone else?

The author says:

Contemporary fantasy with some horror elements.

Nathan says:

Hmm.  Lotta problems here, and I don’t know which to address first.

First, I suppose, is that the main image is composed of elements in disparate styles which don’t blend well together.  You’ve got an over-processed (and poorly composited) photograph of a house in the middle of a digital sketch.  They look like they were thrown together not by design, but by desperation.

The digital sketch is a problem by itself, because it looks just like what it is: A hasty sketch. Lord knows I love sketch artwork, but this is too scribbly to be much more than a guide for a later, more controlled rendition.  And the scribbled details to either side look almost like digital graffiti — they distract without adding anything.

I could go into font choices and such, but I think you’ve gotta correct the main image before any other repairs make sense.

Am I wrong? Other opinions?