Category: Covers

Relative Age [resubmit]

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The author says:

I’m considering updating the cover for Relative Age with this version. The “Quantum Fetus” wasn’t a favorite among critics so I eliminated it along with the simplistic clock, replacing it with clock-based art found on Pixabay.

Relative Age follows a group of physicists and engineers who have accidentally discovered time travel while attempting teleportation. During the first full-scale test an unexpected arrival forces them to shut down the program until the problem can be identified and corrected. A professional troubleshooter is brought in to either find the problem with The Machine or rule it out as a cause, but during his investigation he becomes far more involved in the Project than he ever imagined.

[original submission and comments here]

Nathan says:

You’ve replaced a slew of the specific problems, but I think the overarching problems are still present: It isn’t very dynamic, and doesn’t read well as a thumbnail.

I mean, mid-range purple isn’t a dynamic color, and then with the rest of the image you have… people sitting in folding chairs.  The one part of the image which might be intriguing — the guy fading away in the chamber — is so small that it’s easy to miss (plus, he’s fading away, which means he’s even harder to see, plus he blends into the purple that’s all over the place.)

I found the clock image you used on Pixabay, added the first “man with gun” image I found (it could easily be replaced with “man holding whatever instrument he uses for troubleshooting” so long as it’s dynamic), and gave the title a tilt to make it active.  Voila, the five-minute redo:

Totally crummy, but active and dynamic.

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The Gryphon Saga

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The author says:

If there is one thing that binds the cosmos, it is that only the strongest prevail. Kidnapped and genetically altered by a brutal race, human slaves are forced to fight in an alien war. Hope appears in the form of an alien underground rebellion led by mysterious beings—the Gryphon. Together they engage in a desperate battle. The human heroine, Lianndra, faces a grim reality—sometimes the only way to protect power is to use it.

Nathan says:

The first impression is that you have a pole-dancing cat-cosplayer on the cover. Probably not what you were going for.

I think a large part of the problem is also that your color scheme doesn’t suggest a “grim reality”; it’s too bright and colorful.

One way to suggest oppression is to have the image representing the more powerful antagonist looming over the smaller protagonists.  They don’t have to look like they’re actually in the same space; people are familiar enough with the visual language of movie posters to understand the meaning.  Here’s a five-minute redo to show the concept:

(Plucky freedom fighters stolen from the poster for Tomorrow When the War Began.)

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Regarding Tiberius

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The author says:

Christian Historical Fiction set in 1st Century Roman Empire. The name listed on the cover is that of the narrator of the account, Helena Mithridates Kleopatra, who is also the main protagonist. The mask is sort of the “McGuffin” of the tale (the blood on it, however, is merely symbolic–the mask is never “bloody” in the story). I chose this design because it was simple, direct, and evocative. I made sure the typology was legible at any size. The book is nearly 200k words, so I won’t test your patience with a synopsis. These comments should be enough to go on for the purposes of critiquing the cover.

Nathan says:

Very legible, very clear.  However, I see two big problems:

  1. It says “Roman” very clearly, but doesn’t say “Christian” at all, no matter whether you mean that it’s about 1st-century Christians, or it’s aimed at Christian readers, or both.  I don’t know if there’s a simple iconographic fix which is both historically accurate and evocative to a modern audience (I don’t think the fish symbol has enough umph to do the trick); you may have to resort to a subtitle like “A Novel of First Century Christianity.”
  2. The first-person narrator’s name is all well and good, but where is your name?  Are you going to be anonymous? Is your name going to be present in the Amazon listing?  Unless you intend to be completely anonymous (which is an arguable choice), it’s your name that should be there, not the character’s. (The other problem is that the protagonist’s three-part name doesn’t immediately seem like a single name, given that “Kleopatra” seems like a first name to most modern folks — when I first saw it, I thought it was a list of three separate characters.) You might get away with “The Tale of Helena Mithridates Kleopatra, as told by XX,” but that seems like a Rube Goldbergian workaround, especially if you’re also going to use a subtitle to clarify the Christian angle.  I think you should just do without naming the protagonist on the front cover.

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Ryan Ribble & The Tower of Lore

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The author says:

This young adult fantasy is set in the modern times, but in a fantasy world that is built around various lores from our own. It is supposed to appeal to readers that like Percy Jackson and Harry Potter. The protaganist is Ryan Ribble a rabid gamer, and Deidre Mikals another girl from his own world. Together they must ascend the mysterious tower in a race to restore the princess’s magic before her time runs out and an invading army overtakes the land.

Nathan says:

I can see what you were trying for here, but it really doesn’t work. The main font especially doesn’t look like it’s intentionally pixelated; instead, it looks like an oopsie by someone who didn’t know how to use the software. The image of the boy isn’t especially dynamic or interesting, and his pixelation again looks like a mistake more than a conscious decision.

From your description, it doesn’t seem like this is supposed to be a LitRPG or a “sucked into the game world” adventure, and if that’s the case I think you’re overplaying the “gamer” angle. I think simply having a boy in modern dress (possibly with a Minecraftish tee shirt) surrounded by people in pseudo-medieval garb against a fantasy background would work better.

And your name shouldn’t be the easiest-to-ignore element of the cover.

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Atlantis Lost

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The author says:

This is the beginning of a fantasy series set in the modern oceans, where the last merpeople in existence live in secret, struggling to survive. Over the series, the mers come out of hiding and reshape their relationship with humans through war and peace. The book is set in real underwater locations, and is illustrated with B&W stylised photos of the animals which live there, hence the choice to use a photo for the cover (I took the picture, so no copyright issues). Each book in the series will have an underwater photo from the appropriate location as its cover. This is intended for eBook publication. The cover is as close to finished as I can make it, so not just a concept test.

Nathan says:

Nice photo.

For a cover like this, which is essentially a background photo behind type, you really need typefaces that are going to carry the weight.  This typeface doesn’t.  I can see that you’re trying to convey a slightly antique, slightly fantastic mood with the type, but this typeface is too generic and overused (you also miss an opportunity to play with positioning between the initial caps and the rest of the words in the title).

Also, if “Pelagius Nemo” is the byline (and even I’m not 100% sure that it is), this might be an occasion where “A Novel by” is justified (or something more specific — “An Undersea Adventure by,” “A Saga of (and Under) the High Seas by,” etc.).

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