The author says:
I had forgotten to mention this in my prior submission, but the title is a reference to a major schism ongoing in the first book, as the book series is primarily focused on religion and its flaws. I had taken most of the suggestions into account, such as a more fantasy-esque art style and bigger characters. I did make a font for this that was somewhat Asiatic, but I decided to abandon it as it did not fit the art style.
War rages on as various kingdoms struggle to gain power and maintain their freedom. From the shores of the Grey Sea to the mountains of Cosca, chaos reigns. It is a tale of murder, rape and war. Here a peasant girl masquerades as a princess; a deposed king schemes to regain his throne; and fierce pagans strive to regain their freedom. As opposing forces scheme and plot to gain power, a strange sickness blows in from the mysterious east and ravages the land. Not even Spenta can save them as everyone, from fools to sages, realize that even the most hallowed of souls can do nothing in the end.
[original submission and comments here]
You’re not going to like this: I think the first submission was better.
Why? Because this kind of semi-cartoonish illustration looks like a chapter book or middle-grade book, which is absolutely not your target audience. The readership for an epic political-historical fantasy is not going to pick up something that looks like a volume of The Magic Tree House, and vice versa. The original cover told us nothing about genre etc., but at least it seemed aimed at adults.
There are other issues with the focal event of the illustration and the placement and readability of text, but those would be rearranging deck chairs on the Titanic.
The advice I’ll give you is advice that I give often: Look at the covers of the books that you expect your target readers to have read and liked. See how that audience is used to being told, “These are books for you.”
Other comments? Am I wrong?
The publisher says:
The audio (CD) version of the classic American essay, Self Reliance by Ralph Waldo Emerson.
I think you can see for yourself the problem with the outlined type in the thumbnail: It makes it much harder to read.
Beyond that, I can only suggest that you include your own line from your submission, “the classic American essay,” under the title. And maybe a credit for the reader under Emerson’s name.
Beyond that, I’ve got nothing. Anyone?
The author says:
Natalie just wants to be normal, but after an almost deadly attack by a man named Ash, her life becomes anything but. Now she must save her sister from a literal monster whose made Natalie his number 1 obsession. Young Adult/Fantasy Novel
This is a pretty good cover… but not for your book.
What I’m getting from your description is a suspense thriller, possibly with a paranormal angle. The cover you’ve got is perfect for a young adult drama, but it’s got no suspense or excitement to it. There’s nothing here to tell the target audience for your book that this book is aimed at them. Look at the covers of the books that you’d expect the readers of your book to love as well, and see how your readers expect books to be targeted at them.
And a couple of technical notes:
- Having your byline in a white section tacked on to the bottom makes it look like an afterthought. There’s no reason that your name can’t be in white across the model’s lower back — it’s not like you’re going to be obscuring any important details of the image.
- “Written by” is unnecessary. If you see a phrase and a name on a book cover, you know that the phrase is the title and the name is the author.
The author says:
Audience 15 to 70
Escaping from his home world he crosses through the multiverse to hide on an obscure planet. Jon is arrogant and believes he can do anything that he wants including influencing the events on that planet. His android is the most advanced of its kind as well as being illegal on his planet tries to control Jon with mixed results. The bounty hunters are on his trail and if he doesn’t listen to the advice from his android he is likely to get caught. Jon rarely listens to anyone.
So, is that Jon on the cover? The android? A random alien who looks cool? Why are we looking at what we’re looking at?
I very rarely find “portrait of a person” covers engaging, because they don’t show the character doing anything. I get no insight into the character, and thus into the book, by his presence.
Also, everything is so dark, including the title and byline blending into the illustration. Even just reversing the colors in the type — orange characters with a deep blue border — would make it more readable and eye-catching.
The author says:
The World of Rigel Chase: Rise of the Shaper is the first of a series of fantasy adventure books for middle school kids and up. Rigel is a kid with a gift for talking animals, lush alien forests and powerful young warriors, but he never imagined he could make them all appear in his backyard one night. Thanks to a magic golden medallion, he can make the inhabitants of his imagination come to life and even transform himself into a flying superhero. But things take an ominous turn when Rigel and his new friends are hunted by sinister creatures who want his special powers, and the librarian who gave him the medallion has suddenly disappeared.
Many of my comments center on the boy figure on the left:
- I understand that the shadow under his eye is supposed to be the result of the glow below his plane of vision, but he looks like a zombie.
- I don’t know what he’s looking at, but it’s not the floating medallion in front of him.
- Is he supposed to have a left hand on his right arm? Because that’s what it looks like.
My other comments:
I’m not in love with the border around the letters in the title, and I definitely think it should be removed in the subtitle.
Make your byline bigger! And the font it’s in clashes the the one used for the title and subtitle.
The author says:
Steve’s Web is a book of short stories with a strong Internet Safety theme. The protagonist, Steve, tells his stories in his own words and relates how his online gaming account was hacked, how he convinced his English class (and himself) that Martians have already landed and how a virtual monster put him in hospital! The book is designed to appeal to primarily boys aged between about 9 and 14.
Cute, but… YOU HAVE MARTIANS* IN THE STORY AND THEY’RE NOT MENTIONED OR DEPICTED ON THE COVER???
*or the possibility of Martians
Look at how middle-grade books are marketed. They are not sold with text-heavy covers than don’t really tell you about the story or stories. They are sold with clear, grab-your-attention titles, and clear, grab-your-attention artwork.
Here’s the top row of books Amazon is featuring for that age range:
Clear, interesting text, and an interesting central image. This is how the target audience for your book expects books aimed at them to look. Will they know that your book is also aimed at them? Learn from your competition.
The author says:
Book Micro blurb: ‘When two young fisher sons dare each other to visit the forbidden island of Traakenholt their destinies become entwined in the curse of the ’First and Final Dragon’. Now they must sacrifice everything as they battle the terrible force they have unleashed.’
This book is intended to be part of a hard sci-fi/hard fantasy series. The series is very wide ranging in plots and settings. Nevertheless, I wanted to try and find a graphical style that is simplistic and flexible enough to retain a certain level of commonality across the whole series.
Here’s the problem: Nothing I see could be interpreted as signifying a hard SF novel. You want to take the long view with series branding, and that’s fine, but you’ve got to get readers to open the first book in the series first, and there’s nothing here to tell hard SF readers, “This is a book aimed at you.” (While there’s also nothing that’s “hard fantasy” about this either, at least it doesn’t have the vibe of “definitely not hard fantasy” like is has with hard SF.)
There are other design tweaks we could go into, but until we correct the problem of the initial visual concept not being aimed at your target audience, it’s all straightening deck chairs on the Titanic.
(I will point out, though, that your pseudonym is unbearably twee. Hard SF readers are not a readership known for their endearment to such things.)
The author says:
Waiting for You is a contemporary Women’s Fiction novel set in Charleston, SC. Shortly after Kylie Lewis meets Adam, an aspiring musician with a history of his own loss, her mother is diagnosed with terminal breast cancer. Stricken with the fear of her inevitable loss, she struggles with her budding relationship with Adam, despite his empathy. This novel is aimed at women, mainly aged between 25-35.
With the caveat that I’m not the target audience, here are my comments:
- Any time you wrap, distort or otherwise modify text, it adds as much emphasis to it as bolding it. Thus, your title comes across as “Waiting FOR You.” It also renders the hourglass less immediately recognizable as an object, because it pulls the lower bulb into the mental space of reading the title while leaving the upper bulb in the background. My advice would be to let the “FOR” be in the same unaltered font as “WAITING” and “YOU,” and don’t worry about it exactly overlapping the lower bulb.
- The title font has a problem: the capital “I” has cross-strokes on the top and bottom fully as long as the top of the “T,” rendering the latter harder to read. I’d experiment with using the font’s lowercase “L” in place of the capital “I” both times.
- Your byline is hard to read even at full size, and in thumbnail it’s utterly invisible. I don’t know how married you are to that font, but at the very least I’d enlarge it so it rivals “WAITING” in width, use uppercase for the start of both names, and maybe play with making it bolder.
I’ll leave other comments to the rest of y’all.
The author says:
Renegades at Sea is vol one of the Adventures of Chas from Tas. Chas has sailed on racing yachts all his life , racing and delivering them to all the oceans of the world. The book is about the scary,dangerous, amusing,or downright hilarious adventures that he has had.He is a true gypsy of the sea.
You’ve got a very good, very active illustration. You need to make sure that the type supports instead of conflicting with it.
- You’re using very sedate fonts (which is a nice way to say “dull”). These would be great fonts for interior text, but they underperform on the cover.
- At the very least, you should be able to read some words from the title at thumbnail size. Here, thanks to the combination of thin lines and color blend, I can barely tell that the title exists at thumbnail size.
- You already have Chaz’s face overlapping the main image; you don’t want the second intrusion, the white square with the blurb from Simon Le Bon (!) to clutter it further.
- Remember, the point of the cover is to intrigue the reader enough to either flip the book over and read the back or scroll down and read the online description, depending on the venue. Trim down the blurb, the credits for the forewords, etc. so that the impact of the main image isn’t diluted.
Any other comments?